T1+Writing

__**Monday 20th June**__

__**WALT - identify personifications and use them in our writing**__

S.C. - we can identify the human trait being described we can identify the object being given a human trait we can write our own examples of personification we can explain why this helps to create a picture in our mind


 * Directions: In each sentence, an object or idea is personified. Identify the object or idea that is**
 * being personified and explain which human trait or action is applied to the object or idea.**


 * Personification Worksheet**
 * Personification: a figurative language technique where an object or idea is given human traits or characteristics.**


 * 1. The wind whispered through the dark and gloomy forest.**
 * What is being personified? -** **The wind**
 * Which human trait or quality is given? -** **Whispered.**


 * 2. The gardener lovingly added the manure to his crops believing he was making happy flowers.**
 * What is being personified? -** **Flowers**
 * Which human trait or quality is given? -** **Happy.**


 * 3. As we walked through the scorching desert, the sun beat down on us.**
 * What is being personified? -** **desert**
 * Which human trait or quality is given? -** **beat**


 * 4. Time crawled as Tim sat in the hot detention room painfully watching the clock tic.**
 * What is being personified? -** **Time**
 * Which human trait or quality is given? -** **crawled**


 * 5. The lumberjack leveled the many trees into a clearing and his chainsaw sang its deadly song.**
 * What is being personified? -** **The man’s chainsaw.**
 * Which human trait or quality is given? -** **sang**


 * 6. When Monica walked through the shoe store, each shiny pair of high heels called out to her.**
 * What is being personified? -** **The high heels**
 * Which human trait or quality is given? -** **Called**


 * 1) **When the patriots defeated the redcoat army, freedom rang across the fruited plains.**
 * Which human trait or quality is given?**
 * What is being personified? -** **freedom**
 * Which human trait or quality is given? -** **rang.**


 * 1) **As Alice searched for her missing pencil, she said sarcastically, “Well, I guess it just walked off of my desk.” She looked at her classmates accusingly.**
 * What is being personified? -** **pencil**
 * Which human trait or quality is given? -** **walking**


 * 9. Kelly was so happy that Tom and she were moving in together, but when she walked into her new residence, she dropped her suitcase. She had never seen the inside of the house which Tom’s grandmother had given them, and though she was grateful to receive such a nice gift, the ugly yellow wallpaper in the kitchen screamed at her. She knew she would have a lot of work to do to make her new house livable.**
 * What is being personified? -** **wallpaper**
 * Which human trait or quality is given?** **- scream**


 * 10. William knew that he shouldn’t have eaten the last cookie out of the cookie jar. He knew that his father loved to eat chocolate chip cookies after work, but William ate the last one anyway. Now as he waited for his father to come home, guilt poked and chewed at William. As delicious as the cookie was, William now wished that he had never opened that cookie jar.**
 * What is being personified? -** **Biscuit.**
 * Which human trait or quality is given?** **- poked.**


 * 1) **The sad waters of the icy wasteland streamed through barren landscape**
 * What is being personified? -** **water**
 * Which human trait or quality is given? -** **sad**

2.**As Shelia walked home from school, the wind gripped her in its frigid fingertips.**
 * What is being personified -** **wind**
 * Which human trait or quality is given? -** **gripped**


 * 3.Alan found that his wife had left him, and he felt that joy would never visit his home again.**
 * What is being personified? -** **the mans wife**
 * Which human trait or quality is given? -** **joy**

__Tuesday 5th April 2011 - Friday 8th April 2011__

__WALT - write an argument using persuasive language features to convince people to visit the Bay of Plenty. __

**Success Criteria** **I will state and restate my opinion** **I use a range of language resources and punctuation** **My paragraphs follow the S E E structure** **My writing contains an introduction, 3 key arguments and a conclusion**

**Persuasive Writing - People should visit the Bay Of Plenty!!**

//Do you need a great holiday? I’m sure every one would like a chance to visit the wonderful Bay Of Plenty. Three reasons why you should come to the Bay Of Plenty are, Lots of places in the BOP are really cheap or free, there are loads of things to do that you wouldn’t in some other countries and there are great forests in the Bay Of Plenty like the Redwoods.I believe the Bay Of Plenty is a magnificent place and you should check it out!//

//There are many places in the Bay that are really cheap but some are even free! Do you like free activities? For a start the Mount is a place that you have to visit! Walk up the Mount and see the fabulous view of the ocean and of all the shops below. Who wouldn’t like to see a fabulous view? After a walk around the Mount you can visit our Beach where there are loads of waves or you could go around to the other side of the Mount to the harbour and swim there. You can jump off the wharf or take your fishing rod down there and catch some fish for dinner. My brother is really surfy and he likes to go down to the beach and bring his surf board and take a surf in the wicked waves. My family likes to go down on a hot afternoon and take the little ones in for a swim in the water. There are no waves to bowl them over. Sure there are other beaches around but you can sit there and watch the cruise ships coming in as well. While you are down the Mount there are many lunch places to visit and have a nice meal or snack. It isn’t to expensive and you get what you pay for. I think the Bay Of Plenty is a great place to visit and isn’t to expensive! Do you think the same?//

//There are loads of things to do in the Bay and one of them is the Rotorua Luge. Would you love to be on a go kart flying down the hill and then go on a chair ride back to the top of the mountain and do this as many times as you want but on cost? I love going to the luge and I have so much fun. On the way up you go in a gondolier up to the luge. They have a great cafe up the top of the mountain and have a cool gift shop there to. But the luge isn’t the only ride there. There are others where you can sit in a chair and you rock back and forwards and it looks and feels like you are going to fall out. Another place you should visit is the rock house. Do you like rock climbing? There are many different walls to climb at the rock house and they are all challenging in some way. Just imagine your self if you were having real difficulties climbing up the rock wall and you made it up, think how proud you would be of your self. When you come in you go through the safety instructions first and I assure you, you will be absolutely really safe! Last birthday I went to the rock house with all my friends and it was really fun! We finished up by going for a swim at Bay Wave, another really popular attraction. It is an indoor swimming centre and the main pool is the wave pool. Every so often about 3 times an hour the waves will go on. It feels like you are going through the sea and the waves are every where but they don’t bowl you over like a bowling ball they just allow you to have fun and splash over the top off them or just jump across them. Another popular thing in Bay Wave is the hydroslide. It is really fun! Picture yourself in the pitch black zig zagging around the slide until you splash at the bottom in the miniature pool. Can you see how fun it is to visit the bay of plenty? These are just some of the hundreds of awesome things to do!//

//Another great place to visit is the Rotorua Redwoods. It doesn’t cost anything to come and have a walk or take your bike through some of the great mountain biking tracks. The only additional cost is if you would like to do some orienteering. It doesn’t include a compass but you pay $3 for the orienteering map. Would you love to come to the redwoods and spend the day on your mountain bikes finding the best tracks that you have ever ridden in? I love riding in the redwoods and I’m sure every one else that goes will to! You can pay $5 for a map of the Redwoods so you don’t get lost while you are in there. I recommend for you to pay $5 for a map if you are new to the redwoods. You purchase these maps from the information and visitor centre/gift shop. There are marvelous walking tracks and some wicked horse tracks that you can bring your horse into and have a ride in there. There are beautiful plants in the redwoods and this is the forest where you have an opportunity to most of new zealand’s most native plants like the silver fern and loads of koru. This is a chance to take to go in beneath the world above and around you and explore the nature in this forest. The first time I went to the redwoods I was absolutely shocked at how tremendous it was. From this day on I love going to the redwoods and when easter comes I am going again to stay in the holiday park. I guarantee that going to the redwoods will make your face be shocked and to see how beautiful new zealand is. Come on, when you are the Bay Of Plenty come and see what I mean about the redwoods and how magnificent it really is.//

//Between my three reasons to come to the Bay Of Plenty there are many more that you can discover when you take a trip to the Bay. Take a walk up the Mount and see the marvelous view we get to have and then take the kids down to the beach for a swim either in the harbour or the beach. Have an awesome ride down the luge on a go kart and then have a relaxing ride up in the chair lift back up to the top of the mountain or come and take a splash at bay wave and cool off or go to the rock house and climb some walls. Take a trip to the redwoods for the day with your bike and go through the awesome tracks.The Bay Of Plenty is a great place to visit and live and I recommend you to book your visit today!// 

Fantastic piece of writing Sam. Your introduction states your main ideas and makes it very clear what your intention is for writing. Excellent use of paragraphs and good to see you linking them also. Very detailed paragraphs. Strong imperatives used as well as rhetorical questions, well done. Your conclusion restates your ideas and includes a recommendation. Super progress made Sam, a fantastic effort. Miss Crone :)